Showing posts with label short story. Show all posts
Showing posts with label short story. Show all posts

Monday, March 28, 2011

** Note about what you are about to read. At the writing workshop I attended, at one point, we were directed to look at pictures scattered on a table, pick one, and write a scene in fifteen or twenty minutes or so. I looked, and found a picture of a cloister hall, perhaps not a cloister but a Moorish palace? (not the image you see here). The beauty of the architecture struck me, as did the lighting. However, what struck me most was the sense of emptiness in the hall. I sat down to write, and here you have...

THE CLOISTER

The days had been quiet of late. Sister Marguerite had grown tired of watching from the walls of the cloister, her sanctuary. Sounds no longer echoed, and she passed her days quietly, tending the garden and praying.

The halls were not traveled, for there were no more. Father Emilio returned every day before sundown, and would shake his head sadly. Sister Marguerite would nod her head, and serve the père the meal for the day, a simple soup and fresh bread.

This afternoon, she waited as usual, watching from the walls. Father Emilio should appear on the road, and he would be alone, as always.

Today, he was not.

He hurried up the road, pulling his wagon behind, a draped human form clearly visible alongside the usual bundles of cans and packages of food and supplies.

Sister Marguerite hastily descended the narrow staircase and crossed the hall to the reinforced gate that protected the cloister.

“Open the gate, Sister, for God’s sake, open the gate!”

Sister Marguerite paused, her fingers resting on the heavy mechanism of the lock. She peered through the small pass-through and studied the père.

“Father Emilio, I ask forgiveness, but you must show me.”

“The sun is setting, Sister, please!”

Sister Marguerite’s suspicions increased.

“Father, you must show me.”

Impatiently, Father Emilio opened his robe and exposed his body. His thin frame appeared unharmed, no obvious wounds.

Sister Marguerite averted her eyes only once as he demonstrated that he was clean. She turned her eyes to the cart.

“What is there, Father?”

“Sister, I beg you, give me entrance! The sun will set any moment!”

Truly, the walls around Sister Marguerite were golden with the fading sun.

“Father, you must show me who you have brought.”

Father Emilio’s hands closed his robe, and he looked at her imploringly.

“Please let me in, and I will explain all.”

There was a small noise from the cart, and Sister Marguerite saw the bundle of rags move.

“You must abandon the body.”

“Sister—she is only a child. We can help her!”

“No. I will not open the gate until you have saved her soul.”

“Sister—please—we can help her!”

“I will not open the gate until you save her soul, Father.”

The sunlight had all but vanished, and the halls were no longer orange, but growing cooler in palettes of blues and grays. The torch she had lit in the dining hall did not provide any comfort.

Father Emilio banged on the gate, almost weeping.

“Father, do it! I will pray for you and for her.”

Sister Marguerite, neglecting to drop to her knees, crossed herself and began her prayers.

Father Emilio gave her one last imploring, desperate look before whipping the cloth from the stirring body.

The child, a young woman really, lay as if sleeping. Angelic blond hair curled gently around her face. Pale limbs shifted slightly. One detail marred her beauty: two mangled marks on her neck.

Father Emilio made the sign of the cross. From his belt, he withdrew the large wooden cross which dangled on small wooden beads. He kissed it, and then unwound the leather thong which bound the two points together. He now held a long, sharp wooden stake.

The child suddenly stretched, and her eyes opened. Blue. She turned to face the père.

Before she could smile, or speak, the Father raised his hands over his head, and thrust the stake into the child’s breast.

Her shrieks were terrible.

Sister Marguerite doubted only a moment as she continued her prayers, but then the form began to crumble, and she crossed herself as the blood drinker died.

Sister Marguerite unlocked the door, and pulled the cart inside as Father Emilio gave the crumbling corpse her Last Rites.

He brushed the ash away from his robes, and glared at the Sister.

“We can try to cure them. We must try!”

Sister Marguerite shook her head sadly.

“We can save only their souls, Father Emilio. Ashes to ashes…”

Long after Sister Marguerite had wheeled the cart down the darkened halls to the kitchen, Father Emilio remained at the gate, praying that the body could be reclaimed from the evil as easily as the soul.



[this is MY story, and if you steal it, mutherphucker, I will HUNT you down.]

Wednesday, March 2, 2011

Bad, Naughty February!

February wasn't a good month for my Plan, apparently.

I didn't walk regularly. Now, there were some weather issues, and health issues, but still. I took no recharge breaks either. And, I have gone no further in figuring out what I am NOT going to do than setting a date for either resigning from my board or going inactive (June!).

However, I am pleased to report that I did finally finish the body of the book, and even added a prologue/short story. I don't know if the short story will be able to stand alone, but I am pondering it. Is there editing to do? You bet. I am also having to figure out some formatting issues. I plan to read the whole thing aloud in my final edit, before I get copies to my peer reviewers. I think I have them all picked out.

Additionally, I have a trip planned to Texas for the middle of the month. I need to see my grandmother. It has been four years since I last saw her, and I haven't visited my folks in about as long... I will also be seeing some high school and college classmates during the trip, which will be cool. It will also be a bit weird, methinks.

Let's see, anything else to report. Oh, yes, the 10-minutes one act play festival. I was asked by my boss if I would submit a script for this festival, and of course I said yes. I found out yesterday that submitting a script would mean not acting in any of the plays; and that it all has to be 'family friendly'... whatever the hell that means.

Rant time! Yay!!! I am so FREAKING sick of 'family friendly' theatre in this county. WHY does everything have to be family geared? Are adults second class citizens? I like dark humor, and language, and 'adult situations'... but can I see that on a stage in this county? NOT BLOODY LIKELY.... And it is not just the theatres.... it is everywhere... I cannot TELL you how many times I have gone to my favorite bar, after nine PM, and found CHILDREN there with their parents!!!!

I have reviewed grants for arts funding for the last five years. There are a handful of theatre companies that apply for funding.... and in their FREAKING mission statements they state 'wholesome, family friendly entertainment.' Guess how many list 'morally suspect, adult themed entertainment'.... NONE.

Either I am so far out the norm that I am definitely going to hell, or there is an UNTAPPED market in this county. I hosted a play reading (Anti-Valentine's Day was the theme), and it was an afternoon of Christopher Durang one-acts. We all had fun.

Maybe I should just create my own theatre company, and put in the mission statement: To foster an irreverent, mildly salacious culture and entertain grownups.

Okay, rant mostly done. Now I need to look up a website for creating voodoo dolls before writing my 'family friendly' script.... with zombies....

Thursday, February 10, 2011

Hi. My name is General Madera.

I started writing the short story/ prologue. It could be its own novel. It could be. But, I am working to keep it manageable. Rather, I plan to mercilessly slash it down after I have it all done. It is around ten pages right now. I like editing down. I think this will be interesting. It is fun tweaking words, compressing information, and leaving what is important.

I am learning a lot of things about the world, and what happened. I actually had to take the time to write down a timeline of events. This involved flipping back and forth through a lot of material. It was worth it. I suspect the timeline for this world will become ever more detailed.

Oh, I didn't mention the really interesting part of this story. It is written in first person.... from General Madera's perspective. I started writing it in omniscient third person. Something was bothering me about it, though. It was reading as a really dry summary, in my opinion. I needed to spice it up, give it some personality. And the idea suddenly hit me. We have not met General Madera EVER. We only hear what other people think or say about him.

I rewrote it all. I am excited about this. But it made me realize something about my writing. I rarely use first person. Really. I cannot remember anything I have written in first person. I must have written in first person as part of a class, or something. I use first person in poetry, when I decide to make my sorry attempts. Rather, when I made my sorry attempts. I don't write poetry anymore. I don't really even like to read it.

Sidetrack. So anyway, I have a ten page short story written from General Madera's perspective, and we finally hear some firm information about what happened to the world, how he rose to power, and (drum roll) the Chihuahua rebellion. I am in middle of it right now.

I cannot wait to find out what happens.

Monday, January 24, 2011

Short Story and Targeted Peer Review

This will be a short post. I have company coming tonight, and if I am free early enough, I would like to do some actual writing, instead of writing about writing.

I had a great meeting last week with a guy who coaches writers, and edits, and teaches writing classes. I got many good ideas out of that meeting, but the one that has resulted in an epiphany for me is the idea of submitting a short story excerpt for publication. This would give me feedback on the world I have created (and my writing), which will help when I jump into the mess of trying to publish.

I have been thinking and thinking about some part of my book to try to pull out, and let stand on its own feet. I was even contemplating bugging the Rhino, my sounding board guy... and then I figured it out. The through-line for this story is the conflict between Elena and General Madera, which begins because of Paulson, and the Chihuahua rebellion. I know what happened, and I have revealed parts of it as particular characters learn more about it. THIS IS IT!!

So, after I finish the conclusion of this novel, I get to write a prologue, of sorts. The real story of the Chihuahuan rebellion, and what really happened between Elena and Paulson. This will work all on its own, it will sell the world I have created, and it will force me to tie up all that loose information that has been floating across TWO novels...

I am not even a little bit excited about this, yup, not at all.... (jumping up and down like a crazy woman)

For those of you who don't know what the hell I am talking about, well, let me know, and I will send you the whole damn work in a few weeks. Cuz, that is the next thing I was advised to do. Another round of peer reviews, but a targeted one. As in "Do the male characters seem realistic to you?" and several other questions. I have already done one round of peer reviews, but I need more... Volunteers?

I love writing right now. (big goofy sigh)